Monument Soul

:shock: This is something I would call "broken" the fact that you created this for school explains the inner poorness of this work. you should always be able to free ...

8) yeah, thar's what i'M talking about! I love the premise of the work and the scenery, I can't help but praise your ability to baptise the reader in the ...

:D YEAH!!!, THAT'S HOW YOU DO IT!!! you described every facet of the story you told us everything, standing on all three planes of the situation. physically, mentally, emotionally and ...

To be honest, I agree as well. It sucks, I know, but the point is I had so much fun writing this XD And that's what a hobby of writing ...

hmmm.... sssss.....you certainelay have a lot of spunk..... but I feel that you can be saying more.... Most rappers suck because they rap about themselves and things they don't have ...

oh yeah... I feel you on this one... lately it feels like people are finally starting to pick up on their styles. people aren't just throwing a bunch of alliterations ...

heheheheheheh this is some crazy stuff, i mean, I thought I coul;d right something unuasual. I admire your brave insanity, and fierce defense of your internal sanctity. this was an ...

I gotta say thank you for creating this beautiful work.... you actually beat me to the punch... man...I really am happy to see that someone other than me would address ...

hmm if I wasn't persuaded otherwise, I'd be convinced you were ripping off my concepts :) no offense, but except for a few stanzas like my friend Krupp said, this ...

it's simple and sweet! cool... if you feel it lacks power, change some of the words or tweek the scenario but don't try to stretch it out. a long poem ...

I feel you you on this one, but this is too easy. when you want to throw a deep seated pain out here the best way to do it is ...

(yo homey you accidentally put an n on the end of the the on the final line) this is a great poem, the emotional climate is fitting to the situation, ...

hmm...the poem speaks of your yearning... I don't really feel the stress in the words...that's the problem with most of the writers on this website, they don't want to engage ...

well then... it's a very "chillaxed" kind of narrative. the narrator didn't seem to be suffer even though she/he had to work in order to fulfill his/her new home... I ...

:? ...uhhh cool... the main a happy psycho bi-otch........................ :) .................... :D ........ ................ :twisted: ..........CAN"T .............STOP ........SMILING!!!!!!